Gabriel you added good information to your page but you were lacking pictures of the tribe. Next time try to not to use first person in the introduction and conclusion. There is no need to say "i will" in those paragraphs. If not for those deductions you would've received a top score.
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Gabriel you added good information to your page but you were lacking pictures of the tribe. Next time try to not to use first person in the introduction and conclusion. There is no need to say "i will" in those paragraphs. If not for those deductions you would've received a top score.
55/70
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